Jack, My Blue Eyed Boy (Jack and the Beanstalk poem revised)

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I like where your sympathies lie. And the tone you adapt - like for all good fairy tales - speaking of amazing things as if they happen every day. As if I could walk outside and hear the gold harps and the singing barley.
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Thanks Aubrey. I really want to exorcise the fairytale poems, so I can get on to revising the God poems.

Lucy, with projects at the door howling

O yes Lucy, this is really is a fantastic poem now.

The only stanza that kind of feels too talkative

is stanza 6...take another look at that, I just think its too flip

and adds nothing to the poem.

This is a brilliant work. Brilliant Lucy!

eric

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Thank you so much Eric for taking so much time with my poems. It really does help. I think stanza six should be in another poem about The Old Woman In the Shoe and not in this poem. I'd like to move from pucker of lips and onto the giant's body. thanks again.

Lucy, taking a much needed coffee break while children veg a bit

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