The Goose Girl, Blood of My Blood

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Wonderful, Lucy. Your voice is very strong in this poem and it flows well. I also like your tone which isn't too overbearing, but is rather compassionate and wise. This one's ready for publication!

This breaks my heart....

Such a sad poem. Your writing is great!!!

thanks! :)

Lucy

Thanks Renee. This is a complete rought draft. I run it by my workshop on Thurs. It feels right to me.

Lucy

oopsy i use crazy glue on my heart works reasonably well :)

thanks. :) it means a lot that people comment on these hard-hittinng poems.

Lucy

thanks Tammie. I am happy it resonates with you.

Lucy

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This feels right to me, too. The turns aren't sharp or sudden; they flow - each step logically following the other.

After reading this, I feel that I must go and re-read Dylan Thomas' poetry. This poem has that feeling for the religion of Nature that he knew so well.

Lucy's poem is logical, yes that's true, but I can't help but think of Frank O'Hara saying you have to take your chances and try to avoid being logical. Pain produces logic, which is very bad for you. (from Personism: A Manifesto)
I didn't necessarily mean the logic of the mind, or the logic of equations. I meant, physical logic, the logic of waves meshing into each other...you can't draw them (my first drawing assignment in college was to draw the water in the massive college fountain), but their movement makes the purest sense.

Thanks Aubrey. I love Dylan Thomas.

Lucy

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When people are in pain of any kind sometimes they fall prey to their own "superior" brains. I like logic sometimes and illogic other times. Logic seems to be proven by how good a rhetorician someone happens to be. In poetry, the seeming illogic, brings logic and meaning that may have, hitherto, been hidden. That is what I like about reading and writing poetry.

Lucy

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I love the idea of fractals, that nature makes numerical sense. Maybe a certain mathematical equation can explain the water's movements? I'm not a mathemetican or a scientist, but will ask my husband, who is a computer programmer, geography major and former student of physics.

If I had more time in life, I'd like to learn more math.

Lucy, in the mood to learn a new thing, but without the requisite time

Crazy glue !!! That's it !!

I hope I didn't make you feel bad....the poem touched a lot of tender spots. It's beautiful.....a work of art. If I were you, I wouldn't change a thing....

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Dear Lucy,

You are so right that illogic can bring logic hitherto hidden. I think that's what I try to do in my poems and you just hit the nail on the head. Thank you for your keen understanding and good mind, you are appreciated.

Best wishes, Renee

I like you and your work too. Thanks for your generosity.

Lucy

I didn't feel bad. I was just playing. :)

Lucy

You are welcome Lucy.

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